Chapter 5: Training BEGIN!!
Old sage: Magnus lets go for some training.
Magnus: OK!
Old sage brings Magnus to the female domain. Outside the door sign “Forbidden for male especially old pervert!!!”
Old sage: This place will be your first training ground.
Magnus: Female domain???
Old sage: Yeah!
Magnus: But it’s forbidden for male….
Old Sage: Come on, let’s go in and check it out. Being curious is part of the training. Your president also went through this kind of training…
Magnus: REALLY!!! That will be awesome.
President from AlusMillieum: I wonder is it safe for Magnus being train under the old man. Hope he won’t do that stupid training to Magnus…
Old Sage and Magnus were peeping at girls, and a sudden shout came out from the bathroom…
Old Sage: Run Magnus, if you not want to get yourself killed.
Magnus: What!!! Don’t you have any cloaking technique? Or Hypnotize technique?
Old Sage: If I have, I won’t need to run. Quick run before you DIE!!!
Magnus: What kind of training is this…? AHHHHHHHH!!!!!
Old sage and Magnus were chase by a bunch of female warrior holding knife and sword running around the east domain.
Old sage: Follow me, I know a place that would be safe for us.
Magnus: ok!
Magnus thinking: Is this what president do for his training?
Old sage: Tiny brat, are you thinking that is that what president does for his training? Right?
Magnus: Wah this old man really knows everything.
Old sage: Once you become a Sage, you can read peoples thoughts.
Magnus: IS IT?
Old sage: Old sage never lies.
Reach the top of the building.
Old sage: Here we go…
Old sage jumped across the building… is 100m apart between the building.
Magnus: That old man is awesome. Hey old man what about me? Thinking of leaving me here alone and take all the responsibility?
Old Sage: Come on over. It’s easy.
Magnus: OMG!! You asking me to jump. NO WAY!!!! I will not jump. Under my dead body.
Old sage: You better jump if not your reputation in this guild will be pretty bad. Girls will say “oh what kind of the pervert boy is that, first day of entering the guild and do this kind of dirty work”. So for that no girl will want you for the rest of your life.
Magnus: REST OF MY LIFE!!!!!!
Old sage: Oh! The girls are rushing up.
Old sage thinking: I wonder if the legend is true about the angelic wing appear from the element of Tian.
Magnus was shivering. Try to come up with his own conclusion, Jump or being name as pervert for the rest of his life.
Magnus: OK! Seems no choice for me… Here I come.
Magnus jump but…
Magnus: AHHHHHHHHH!!!! I can’t make it.
Magnus praying: No god I don’t want to die so early, I want to play more games, have girlfriend and have my own family… I DON’T WANA DIE NOW!!!!
Old Sage was eagerly watching at Magnus to see if the angelic wing will be activate.
75m to ground. Magnus element power suddenly activate on his right hand. The word Tian in Chinese appears on his right hand. And a pair of wing appears on Magnus’ back.
Old sage: No, that’s not the angelic wing. That is…
Meanwhile, the president meeting.
Head Sage (Leader of the 26 sage): We have terrible news, as you know dark society has begun to take action. And it seems to be interested in knowing the strength of the new recruits that just been recruit from the recent guild event.
President from PlikaMillieum: WHAT? If that’s the case, those dark society members should have appear in my guild. But I didn’t see them nor sense their present.
President from ZanMillieum, BriMillieum, CaseoMillieum, FretMillieum, KaliMeiilieum, NelimosMillieum, VlikaMillieum, SertagMillieum: Ya why didnt they come to investigate our recurits?
Head Sage: So that means only AlusMillieum being targeted by the dark society.
President from ZanMillieum: Besides that, which association from the dark society that attack AlusMillieum?
Head Sage: From the description that Alusian told me, I confirm is Morgen Society.
President from NelimosMillieum: Ohhh Morgen Society, Alusian didn’t one of your BEST friend is in that association too?
Alusian went silent.
President from SertagMillieum: Please don’t talk about unnecessary things in this meeting.
President from NelimosMillieum: Oh sorry! I didn’t meant to, it just slip off my mouth, I just can’t control it.
Head Sage: I am here to announce that we are going to activate the first level of warning system. Guild presidents, make sure to do what you need to do for the first level warning exercise.
10 President from the 10 guild: Yes!
Head Sage: Dismissed…
All the 10 president went back to their guild.
Old Sage: WHAT!! NO way he could achieve that with his current level.
Old Sage: Holy saint Wing.
Magnus fly towards the old sage.
Old sage was stunned for a moment.
Old sage: That was a nice skill.
Magnus: That was awesome, but we need to run. Quick…
Magnus drag the old sage and run to a safer place to avoid being notice by those female warrior.
They reached the west domain…
Magnus: ARE YOU TRYING TO KILL ME!!! I ALMOST DIE…
Old Sage: congrats, you have obtained the Holy Saint Wings.
Magnus: Holy Saint Wings?
Old Sage: Ya, the wings that save you. It’s activated from your element, Tian.
Magnus: WOW, Awesome.
Old sage: I thought you will be obtaining…
Magnus: Yes?
Old sage: Nothing.
Old sage: Now let’s start with our second stage of training… This kid seems to be stronger than his looks. Maybe stronger than Alusian if he train harder.
Magnus: Yeah! Come on old man stop standing there. Let’s start the second training!!
Magnus appear to be strong but how strong can it go. Why Alsuain best friend enter the Morgen society? See the next chapter: Chapter 6: The true power of Tian.
Sunday, February 11, 2007
Saturday, February 10, 2007
chapter 4
Chapter 4: Emergency! Dark Society appears!!
Guild castle of AlusMillieum
President from AlusMillieum: Left assistant bring all the other recruits to their respective domain and Right assistant call all the chief commander for a short meeting at the north domain.
Left and Right assistant: Yes president.
President from Alusmillieum: Magnus, from today onwards I will train you by myself and to see how far you can really go in the future in my guild. So training for these 10 days will be extremely tough.
Magnus: Yes president.
An old sage walking towards the Alusian and Magnus.
Old sage: Hi little brat oh with another tiny brat.
Magnus: Whose that?
President from Alusmillieum: Old man is you. Did you happen to drop by to see who I have recruited?
Old sage: Nono. I have no time for that. I am here because …. Hmmm let me think … Why do I come here for?
Magnus: Old man, little brat? Is that old man the previous president of this guild?
President from Alusmillieum: You are right. How did you know?
Magnus: That’s because you guys are having the same hairstyle.
Alusian knock on Magnus head…
President from Alusmillieum: IT’S NOT THE SAME. MY HAIR IS MORE SPIKER THAN HIS…
Magnus: I though is the same…
President from Alusmillieum: Say that again MAGNUS!!!!!
Magnus: Sorry!!!
Old sage: hahaha same kind of personality when you first join this guild Alusian… This really brings back memory.
President from Alusmillieum: Straight to the topic. Old man why did you come here for?
Old sage: Oh ya, here you go. A letter from the secret agent.
President from Alusmillieum: What is inside this letter?
Old sage: see for yourself.
Alusian open the letter and read…
President from Alusmillieum: This is…. SERIOUS. And you old man still remain so calm.
Magnus: What’s serious?
President from Alusmillieum: Dark society has begun to attack the south city of pleasome.
Old sage was looking at the new recruit.
Old sage: seems like more guys than girls… Not fun…
President from Alusmillieum: YOU STILL HAVE TIME FOR THIS KIND OF PERVERTED STUFF!!!!!!
President from Alusmillieum: Sorry Magnus, I have to go for the president meeting….
BOOM!!! Explosion from the entrance of the guild…
Alusian, old sage and Magnus ran towards the entrance.
President from Alusmillieum: Who the hell are you?
Dark society member (1): Don’t be so rude to people, after all I am one of your guest.
President from Alusmillieum: One of your guests. Magnus…
Alusian push Magnus away as another dark society member try to attack Magnus from the back… And the guy landed beside his own member…
Dark society member (2): Looks like I have missed him.
While the dark society member (2) is copying Magnus data…
President from Alusmillieum: What are you guys coming here for? Never mind. This is over… I will catch you with my own hand…
Dark society member (2): Done!
Dark society member (1): Seems like our job is done. Bye bye…
Dark society member 1 and 2 when off by their own summoning Twin head eagle.
President from Alusmillieum: Damm I have miss them… But what is their purpose of coming to my guild…
Old sage: To get Magnus data.
President from Alusmillieum: Get Magnus data?
Magnus: My data?
Old sage: Its pretty obvious that the dark society is interested in Magnus right now as he possess the ultimate rare advance element, Tian. Oh little brat don’t you have a meeting to attend?
President from Alusmillieum: Ya I almost forgot.
Magnus: What about me?
President from Alusmillieum: hmm, just nice. Old man can you help me with this boy, prepare him for the upcoming task for the guild event?
Old sage: Sure, this will be interesting…
Alusian called his assistant to cancel the chief commander meeting and left to the headquarter.
What will the training like with the old sage and what is the dark society real motive aside getting information about Magnus. See the next Chapter. Chapter 5: Training BEGIN!!
Guild castle of AlusMillieum
President from AlusMillieum: Left assistant bring all the other recruits to their respective domain and Right assistant call all the chief commander for a short meeting at the north domain.
Left and Right assistant: Yes president.
President from Alusmillieum: Magnus, from today onwards I will train you by myself and to see how far you can really go in the future in my guild. So training for these 10 days will be extremely tough.
Magnus: Yes president.
An old sage walking towards the Alusian and Magnus.
Old sage: Hi little brat oh with another tiny brat.
Magnus: Whose that?
President from Alusmillieum: Old man is you. Did you happen to drop by to see who I have recruited?
Old sage: Nono. I have no time for that. I am here because …. Hmmm let me think … Why do I come here for?
Magnus: Old man, little brat? Is that old man the previous president of this guild?
President from Alusmillieum: You are right. How did you know?
Magnus: That’s because you guys are having the same hairstyle.
Alusian knock on Magnus head…
President from Alusmillieum: IT’S NOT THE SAME. MY HAIR IS MORE SPIKER THAN HIS…
Magnus: I though is the same…
President from Alusmillieum: Say that again MAGNUS!!!!!
Magnus: Sorry!!!
Old sage: hahaha same kind of personality when you first join this guild Alusian… This really brings back memory.
President from Alusmillieum: Straight to the topic. Old man why did you come here for?
Old sage: Oh ya, here you go. A letter from the secret agent.
President from Alusmillieum: What is inside this letter?
Old sage: see for yourself.
Alusian open the letter and read…
President from Alusmillieum: This is…. SERIOUS. And you old man still remain so calm.
Magnus: What’s serious?
President from Alusmillieum: Dark society has begun to attack the south city of pleasome.
Old sage was looking at the new recruit.
Old sage: seems like more guys than girls… Not fun…
President from Alusmillieum: YOU STILL HAVE TIME FOR THIS KIND OF PERVERTED STUFF!!!!!!
President from Alusmillieum: Sorry Magnus, I have to go for the president meeting….
BOOM!!! Explosion from the entrance of the guild…
Alusian, old sage and Magnus ran towards the entrance.
President from Alusmillieum: Who the hell are you?
Dark society member (1): Don’t be so rude to people, after all I am one of your guest.
President from Alusmillieum: One of your guests. Magnus…
Alusian push Magnus away as another dark society member try to attack Magnus from the back… And the guy landed beside his own member…
Dark society member (2): Looks like I have missed him.
While the dark society member (2) is copying Magnus data…
President from Alusmillieum: What are you guys coming here for? Never mind. This is over… I will catch you with my own hand…
Dark society member (2): Done!
Dark society member (1): Seems like our job is done. Bye bye…
Dark society member 1 and 2 when off by their own summoning Twin head eagle.
President from Alusmillieum: Damm I have miss them… But what is their purpose of coming to my guild…
Old sage: To get Magnus data.
President from Alusmillieum: Get Magnus data?
Magnus: My data?
Old sage: Its pretty obvious that the dark society is interested in Magnus right now as he possess the ultimate rare advance element, Tian. Oh little brat don’t you have a meeting to attend?
President from Alusmillieum: Ya I almost forgot.
Magnus: What about me?
President from Alusmillieum: hmm, just nice. Old man can you help me with this boy, prepare him for the upcoming task for the guild event?
Old sage: Sure, this will be interesting…
Alusian called his assistant to cancel the chief commander meeting and left to the headquarter.
What will the training like with the old sage and what is the dark society real motive aside getting information about Magnus. See the next Chapter. Chapter 5: Training BEGIN!!
Friday, February 9, 2007
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chapter 3
Chapter 3: Begin with the Ten days training!
President from AlusMillieum: You possess an ADVANCE ELEMENT!!!
Magnus: Advance element?? Whats that?
President from AlusMillieum: In the element ranking system, we have grouped them into various types of group.
First is basic element normally for student at the age like you to have. There are 5 of them: Fire, Water, Ground(Di), Wind and lightning. These are the five.
Secondly for an advance element this is 10 times more powerful then basic element. There are also 5 of them: Tian, Gold, Earth, Demon, Steel
Thirdly is Summoning element. This is a high level skill element warrior can achieve. Some of the element warrior may not even achieve this kind of summoning due to their elements combination. This I will explain to you later on when I got time.
Last and the most powerful technique is the fusion technique. If you can achieve this technique, you will be the same level as the president of every guild…
Magnus: Wow, that’s awesome.
Announcer: President from the 10 guild please come forward and chose the students for your guild…
President from AlusMillieum: sorry Magnus I need to go to the stage now for the student selection, hmm please follow my assistant as you are now a warrior from my guild…
Magnus: OK!
All the presidents are standing on the stage.
Announcer: Let the selection BEGIN!
Cheer from the spectators
All the president are now seriously choosing their recruits
After 20 min of selection
Announcer: OK! The selection of the new recruits has ended.
Announcer: Now all the student that has been selected by the presidents please stand behind the president that chose you and form a single row.
Students all forming rows behind the president that chose them.
Announcer: Now, we will let the president from each guild announce their warrior representative for the upcoming task! Let us start with the previous champion, ZanMillieum.
ZanMillieum: Fret who has a basic element of water. Consider him as a 2nd rate fighter.
FretMillieum: Korala who has a basic element of water. Consider him as a 2nd rate fighter.
PlikaMillieum: TCS who has a basic element of Fire. Consider him as a 2nd rate fighter.
Magnus: Wow TCS got himself a nasty president.
BriMillieum: Zanrok who has a basic element of Wind. Consider him as 2nd rate fighter.
CaseoMillieum: Olisop who has 1 basic element1 of ground. Consider him as 2nd rate fighter.
SertagMillieum: Justin who has a basic element of lightning. Consider him as a 2nd rate fighter.
VlikaMillieum : TTL who has a basic element of wind. Consider him as a 2nd rate fighter.
NelimosMillieum: Lucius who has a basic element of fire. Consider him as a 2nd rate fighter.
KaliMeiilieum: Mirgin who has a basic element of lightning. Consider him as a 2nd rate fighter.
Announcer: Now let AlusMillieum announce his recruit for the upcoming task…
President from AlusMillieum: Come down Magnus.
Magnus ran towards the stage.
AlusMillieum: Magnus who has an advance element of Tian. Consider him as a 3rd rate warrior.
Announer: Wow a 3rd rate warrior from the guild AlusMillieum.
President from PlikaMillieum: That’s not fair. He is not one of the chosen ones and you may fake it that he have the element of Tian. It’s IMPOSSIBLE.
President from NelimosMillieum: But it’s true. That guy really has the element of Tian. Alusian was clever by hiding the talented guy for himself.
President from AlusMillieum: Aren’t you guys doing the same thing. Suppressing the element power to its lowest to those who have the high potential to become a chief commander.
President from PlikaMillieum: Ok that makes it a draw. So let us start with the training session.
Announcer: Ok let start with the next task training. Duration 10 days!
All the president: OK! Let’s go.
The president along with their assistant and the selected recruits gone off to their own guild castle.
Announcer: That’s all for today, the next task will be 10 days later and the place will be here. Cya then.
President from AlusMillieum: You possess an ADVANCE ELEMENT!!!
Magnus: Advance element?? Whats that?
President from AlusMillieum: In the element ranking system, we have grouped them into various types of group.
First is basic element normally for student at the age like you to have. There are 5 of them: Fire, Water, Ground(Di), Wind and lightning. These are the five.
Secondly for an advance element this is 10 times more powerful then basic element. There are also 5 of them: Tian, Gold, Earth, Demon, Steel
Thirdly is Summoning element. This is a high level skill element warrior can achieve. Some of the element warrior may not even achieve this kind of summoning due to their elements combination. This I will explain to you later on when I got time.
Last and the most powerful technique is the fusion technique. If you can achieve this technique, you will be the same level as the president of every guild…
Magnus: Wow, that’s awesome.
Announcer: President from the 10 guild please come forward and chose the students for your guild…
President from AlusMillieum: sorry Magnus I need to go to the stage now for the student selection, hmm please follow my assistant as you are now a warrior from my guild…
Magnus: OK!
All the presidents are standing on the stage.
Announcer: Let the selection BEGIN!
Cheer from the spectators
All the president are now seriously choosing their recruits
After 20 min of selection
Announcer: OK! The selection of the new recruits has ended.
Announcer: Now all the student that has been selected by the presidents please stand behind the president that chose you and form a single row.
Students all forming rows behind the president that chose them.
Announcer: Now, we will let the president from each guild announce their warrior representative for the upcoming task! Let us start with the previous champion, ZanMillieum.
ZanMillieum: Fret who has a basic element of water. Consider him as a 2nd rate fighter.
FretMillieum: Korala who has a basic element of water. Consider him as a 2nd rate fighter.
PlikaMillieum: TCS who has a basic element of Fire. Consider him as a 2nd rate fighter.
Magnus: Wow TCS got himself a nasty president.
BriMillieum: Zanrok who has a basic element of Wind. Consider him as 2nd rate fighter.
CaseoMillieum: Olisop who has 1 basic element1 of ground. Consider him as 2nd rate fighter.
SertagMillieum: Justin who has a basic element of lightning. Consider him as a 2nd rate fighter.
VlikaMillieum : TTL who has a basic element of wind. Consider him as a 2nd rate fighter.
NelimosMillieum: Lucius who has a basic element of fire. Consider him as a 2nd rate fighter.
KaliMeiilieum: Mirgin who has a basic element of lightning. Consider him as a 2nd rate fighter.
Announcer: Now let AlusMillieum announce his recruit for the upcoming task…
President from AlusMillieum: Come down Magnus.
Magnus ran towards the stage.
AlusMillieum: Magnus who has an advance element of Tian. Consider him as a 3rd rate warrior.
Announer: Wow a 3rd rate warrior from the guild AlusMillieum.
President from PlikaMillieum: That’s not fair. He is not one of the chosen ones and you may fake it that he have the element of Tian. It’s IMPOSSIBLE.
President from NelimosMillieum: But it’s true. That guy really has the element of Tian. Alusian was clever by hiding the talented guy for himself.
President from AlusMillieum: Aren’t you guys doing the same thing. Suppressing the element power to its lowest to those who have the high potential to become a chief commander.
President from PlikaMillieum: Ok that makes it a draw. So let us start with the training session.
Announcer: Ok let start with the next task training. Duration 10 days!
All the president: OK! Let’s go.
The president along with their assistant and the selected recruits gone off to their own guild castle.
Announcer: That’s all for today, the next task will be 10 days later and the place will be here. Cya then.
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